During the war and the holocaust Jeannine had to be hidden because she was a Jews. Jeannine's father drove her in a streetcar to a woman's house. That was the last time she ever saw her father. She lived in that house for 2 years. She didn't have a normal childhood and just because she was a Jew. She didn't have no toys and she barley got to go outside. She had to invent imaginary friends cause she didn't have none. When she did go outside she could only go to the back yard so that she wouldn't get seen. She never felt loved of cared for. In those 2 years she never got a hug from no one or a kiss. The Nazis would always have parades, and when they did everybody had to open their house doors and watch. Jeannine would get hidden in the outhouse in the back yard. Jeannine always hide in a little Conner of the little house. The little house had a crack on the door and Jeannine never looked out it because she was to afraid that she would get seen by the Nazis. In 1994 Jeannine and her family were reunited except her father. He got exterminated by the Nazis. The day that she reunited with her family she remembers going to her old house and seeing alot of soldiers. And she remembers a soldire walking up to her and giving her a chocolate. Jeannine also started school that year.
[THE PICTURE ABOVE IS AN IMAGE OF JEANNINE WHEN SHE WAS 7 YEARS OLD]
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ReplyDeleteNice work on your Blog #2, Anjelica:) You are doing a good job of separating your blog post into paragraphs. Just make sure you are organizing your content in a logical way so that your reader doesn't get confused. When you revise, you may want to rearrange the information about Eva into chronological order. I really like the way that you paraphrased Eva's story and then reflected on what it means to you--very good!
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