Max Vandenberg was feeling scared, nervous, and unwanted. When he was traveling to the Huberman’s, he was so nervous that his hands were swimming in sweat and his fingers were clutched to the book Mien Kampf.
I’ve been in the same position Max is in. I've tried to convince people that I was someone I really wasn’t. I didn’t change what I look liked or what I wore, but I did change the way I talked, and my attitude. I started treating my parents wrong and lost a lot of my good friends. I can kind of relate to this because Max changed to help someone out but I changed to look good in front of people who weren’t really my friends. At the moment that I was doing it I felt like I was doing the right thing but after problems started happening I felt like I had to leave and get away from those people that were making me the person I wasn’t and didn’t want to be.
“I’m leaving soon” (Zusak 158)
“Goodbye” (Zusak 159)
These quotes relate to the topic because they explain Max changing, and it relates to me because it explains me leaving the people I thought were my friends and starting my life all over.
WORK CITED
Zusak, Markus. The Book Thief. NY: Alfred A. Knopf, 2005. Print.
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ReplyDeleteNice start, Anjelica! Great picture too:) Very good job with your Works Cited, just make sure that you are putting your quotes from the book into your paragraphs and writing about how they relate to the topic. Don't just put them in at the end without telling the reader why these quotes are important and why you picked them. Double-check the MLA format for proper in-text citations as well. It should look like this: (Zusak 159).
Make sure you get to 250 words--this post is at 171 right now. Let me know if you'd like me to show you how to check!
Be sure to introduce your topic or the question you are writing about, rather than just jumping right in. Make sure your reader can follow you and be specific. ex: "I can kind of relate to this because Max changed to help someone out" how did Max change to help someone out? Summarize what happened in the book so that your reader knows exactly what you are talking about.
The highest score you can get on this post is 9/10 because this was due on 9/23, but I'm sure you'll get all 9 of your points when you revise:)
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